Apr 12 2014

Boom. Shock. Divinity.

Published by at 7:11 am under Uncategorized

Boom, the earth quakes as it shakes at my feet,
Soulless tomorrow as I accept defeat,
Soulless and hallow in my own retreat.

Shock hits my mind as I gasp through the stone,
Cold as the sold like the dead all alone,
Cold as the broken, cold as the stone,
Colder and colder as I break my own bones,

Divinity it hits me, I feel it consume me,
From the pain I am now free,
Boom. Shock. Divinity.

This post was submitted by Dennis.

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2 Responses to “Boom. Shock. Divinity.”

  1. pixieon 12 Apr 2014 at 11:39 am

    I like the idea of this. The use of bold is quite interesting, attracted my attention immediately.
    The second stanza has stone as a rhyming word twice. (Is this intentional?)
    The periods used in the last line are incredible. Makes the words seem quite sudden, as if there was an actual “BOOM”, as if you’re experiencing the shock yourself.
    Awesome work.

  2. Dennison 12 Apr 2014 at 5:04 pm

    Yeah. Stone was in a diffrent context and I used it twice intentionally. it doesn’t mess with the rhyme too much, just kinda made it have a different feel so I went with it. Gasping to get through it, but I become as cold as it. For some reason it felt important to express that progression. It’s damn near distasteful until you hit the last line of the rhyme scheme. Haha.

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