Feb 12 2006

Dying on my path

Published by at 12:54 am under Sad Love Poems

Dying on my path


Slowly I am walking down my path,
step by Step, it is getting more exhausting,
people are looking out of windows ; children laugh,
while the sadness in the air is everlasting.

Smoke is coming out of houses roofs, dark and grey,
cars are driving beside, some of them leave the street,
I am raising my head, raise my hands and prey,
the sun is shining bright, I am beaten down by heat.

Birds are singing their melodies ; spending delight,
when raindrops start pouring down my window,
questioning, if I live or if I am just blinded by light,
if it is the love I feel or another kind of sorrow.


-By MiSun

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11 responses so far

11 Responses to “Dying on my path”

  1. Gueston 12 Apr 2006 at 7:29 pm

    i think uoi need abit more sence in this poemssorry who veer worte it and at the end it dosnt6 make a alot of sence girl or guy take more time on poetry at youll havr a better poems trust me im a poetry lover

  2. Gueston 28 May 2006 at 12:23 am

    this isn\’t exactly showing how u feel

  3. Gueston 20 Nov 2006 at 7:48 pm

    Didn\’t read all but its okay I think

  4. Gueston 24 Nov 2006 at 7:35 pm

    Doesn\’t exactly show how you feel, if oyu want to express use more deep words that dig down to your heart.

  5. ricabonneon 18 Jul 2007 at 1:20 am

    another poem pass it to mummy jancy ok :sigh

  6. tashaon 05 Dec 2007 at 11:43 pm

    hey im tasha and i have to say i love your poem im a poem writter my self well a starter and your poem as well shown me something i havent seen before so thank you :grin

  7. karinnaon 18 Feb 2008 at 8:56 am

    it was OK NOT GREAT JUST OK, it just doesn\’t express your true emotions at all its just as if a path to your true emotions and the path is cut of you could\’ve done better. :sigh

  8. i dont knowon 04 Apr 2008 at 9:20 pm

    why people are criticizing it so much
    but it\’s the only truly touching one i\’ve read so far

  9. jingon 21 Nov 2008 at 1:26 am

    show and express what you really feel

  10. yAmIni_gUrLon 02 Feb 2009 at 8:21 am

    :cry LovE iS pAinFuLL 4EvEr….mY bOyfRiEnD cHeAt mE

  11. isolatedon 28 Apr 2009 at 12:06 pm

    its truly said dat d one who hurts u a lot u love him d most… same wid me… he got tired of hurting.. betrayed me… n i still love him n will love him forever…

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