Jul 15 2011
Eternal
Though we fight
Though we make each other cry
You will always be my savior
You will always be mine
I’m covered in bruises
I’ve drowned into this sea
But I didn’t give up holding my breath
Coz I know you’ll save me
I should’ve left by now
But something has clutched my hand
I don’t know whether its you
I know I can never depart
Though we make each other insane
Though we never concur
We agree that we will always love
I’ll always be your dreamer
This post was submitted by Trisha Runel.
I really like this. The rhyming was done in an almost… flowy way. (If that makes sense.)
The title was a bit off, though. But it works well, still.
It wasn’t too short and it wasn’t too long, I never grew bored and I don’t feel as if you’ve said too little for me to understand.
Every word you wrote seemed as if it was chosen perfectly for what it stands for, what it means. It was all very neatly explained, somehow. Yet extremely confusing.
Left me still trying to figure out what you were saying, but at the same time knowing, you know?
Amazing poem.
This is really gud,, loved this poem, crazy love poem (y) awesome poem
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