Sep 09 2010
Because of Her
Her perfect face
The nicest eyes
No flaw to place
I don’t even despise
I’m much too young
Four years away
Yet I still sung
About a way
Too far, too late
Your with her now
Is she your fate?
Why wouldn’t you wait?
Her fancy home
Her connected folk
You won’t roam
You’ll never be broke
Her likable friends
Her whitest smile
I don’t meet ends
I don’t have style
She kindly stops
If you fell down
She buttons your tops
You’ll love her gown
She makes you laugh
She gives you joy
I’m just the other half
Of a forgotten, broken toy
Would you remember me
If you saw me on the street?
Would you be happy with glee?
Do I make ends meet?
Hurt me if you please
Ignore me if you prefer
But soon I’ll be with ease
And it’s all because of Her.
Beautiful!!! WOW just beautiful!!!
This is beautiful…and heartwrenching in it’s own way (at least to me since I’m kinda going through it.) It’s really good 🙂 You did a good job. Keep writing amazingly.
I love it!! Amazing!!
That has really good beat when you read it! ^^ Nothing I love more than a poem that has a consistent rhythm.
but how about “could I make ends meet” rather than “do” because “if” she saw you on the street, grammatically you shouldn’t be using the word “do” anyways. ;P
You seem to have a lot of poet potential.
Best wishes,
Asian Shazz.
This is an amazing poem! ;-(