Jul 30 2010

In a Whisper

Published by at 8:02 pm under Dark Love Poems

I’ve had enough, I’m giving up, I see no reason here today,
To Hope and pray that it’ll be ok,
Because theres nothing I can say,
Nothing will make them understand,
Nothing will make them see,
I’m trapped inside this dark black hole,
And it’s me and only ME!
Nothing will help to ease the pain,
Nothing will i say will make me sane,
they cannot win, they need to see,
that I have changed,
That this is me
I’m simply the beginning of my end,
I don’t need help, I don’t need friends,
I’m dying slowly inside and out,
And you don’t even know what deaths really about,
So just go away, leave me alone,
I’m more than happy here on my own,
I’m fine with death, I don’t need you,

And then I whispered Yes I Do…

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6 responses so far

6 Responses to “In a Whisper”

  1. Pauloon 09 Aug 2010 at 1:45 pm

    hmmm personally I think the last line should be “but silently I whisper yes I do…” but overall this is a great poem

  2. Monseon 15 Aug 2010 at 12:07 am

    I agree with Paulo about the last line but the rest of the peom is really great. =]

  3. Karleeon 12 Sep 2010 at 6:53 pm

    This was an amazing poem. I do this the last line could have been better different, but if you change it, it wouldn’t be your poem. Leave it how it is, its perfect. Great job.

  4. Leahon 14 Sep 2010 at 1:14 am

    threw the deepest part of my life I was there and then I whispered Yes I Do

  5. glassworxon 16 Sep 2010 at 12:12 pm

    Love this piece, short and… Well I’d say sweet, but how about poignant…

  6. pixieon 23 Oct 2010 at 5:54 pm

    I think this poem is really cute and I think the last line is absolutely perfect as is!

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