Jun 26 2011
Please dont leave me
love, adoration, lust
like, desire, want
crave, hunger, must
depression, sadness, sorrow
despair, outrage, denial
hear, listen, comprehend
see, watch, observe
damn this
how am i supposed to explain this???
how i felt
the day he left me
sobbing
on my knees
how am i supposed to make u understand
the way i felt when he rejected me
the way i begged him to stay
to
please
please
just dont leave me
not u
how am i supposed to make u understand
that when he walked out of that door
one step
two steps
gone
that my life
and all i have, all i care for
fell apart
how am i supposed to get u to realize
that when i pleaded for mercy from him
i knew my mind would be lost if he left
he was the thread that kept me together
he was the sun to my rain
the smile to my frown
the warmth to my cold
he was the hug when i needed it
the kiss when it was all too much
he was the hand that picked me up
the one to tuck me in
now im begging u
to please just get what im saying
understand this
feel this
breath this
because i dont want to bear it alone
oh my goshness, im a fan of urs!!
YOUR NOT ALONE! good poem. Very dramatic!
thanks, guys. i appreciate the support
Guys, i was told that I had to comment that this poem was shit; Who can guess who told me to comment it?
P.S; Doing A Favour; This Poem = Shit, Not My Honest Opinion.
gr8 work…..bye the way that guy is unlucky…heartbreaker!!!!
haha. thanks, trisha
appreciate the comment :p
Good poem but I think that you should not use chat lingo in poems like ‘u’ and ‘i’
Also it is better to capitalize the 1st character where required e.g. in first word of new lines and poem title
It will make the poems like more mature and professional and take away the teenasigh look from them 🙂
Thank you, admin. I’ll be sure to do so from now on. :p
Okay so I was set on believing this was your boyfriend but then I heard the line, “the one who tucked me in” and now I’m wondering, is this your dad? Because if it is I feel for you , because my dad went an hour ago to work and I still haven’t seen him SO im here if you need comfort. Just puttin it out there, I make a mean peanut butter sandwhich.
Thank you, josiah. I’ll be sure to remember that. It’s not my father, though.
So beautiful. Made me cry ;-( ;-(
Thanks