Apr 12 2014
Stuck without Sunshine
…Blarin’ the music,
Starin’ in the mirror,
I swear this house is haunted,
Cause I swear I still can hear her,
All of my time spent staring down the hallway,
Wondering what happened to the vision of our yesterday,
Expecting you to come back and save me from my sanity,
Expecting you to snap back and come back to reality,
Tragedy; tragically gone but not from my memory,
Haunted by the memories we’ve shared through out our history,
They’re gone with the wind
Gone through time,
They say that it gets better when you lay it in a rhyme,
They say that it gets better if I block you from my mind,
But what they say just doesn’t matter cause you were a one of a kind,
It’s like their blind,
Stuck in time,
Stuck without Sunshine.
(3 votes, average: 5.00 out of 5)
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awesome poem Dennis
Thanks 🙂
Amazing poem.
I love the use of the ellipse at the start of the poem, seems quite controversial in terms of general poetic devices seeing as I don’t believe I’ve ever seen anybody use it quite in that way.
The rhyming is formless, almost. As if you’ve done away with normal ideas regarding rhyme scenes and patterns and have just put down the words as they needed to be written.
“Tragedy; tragically gone but not from my memory,
Haunted by the memories we’ve shared through out our history,”
These lines are incredible. I found myself rereading them over and over again.
“But what they say just doesn’t matter cause you were a one of a kind,
It’s like THEY’RE blind,
Stuck in time,
Stuck without Sunshine.”
Those lines were also absolutely amazing.
Thank you for posting :3
schemes* :p not scenes.
wow, dennis I love your poems. I get instant feels…wish I could dissect this like pixie but oh well, for now all I’ll say is wowzers that was an awesome poem
Thanks guys! 8)