Nov 30 2011
Trufully
They turn a blind eye to my sadness
They leave me in the dark
They don’t see the scars on my arm
From the knife that was so sharp
They turn away in fear
When I look them in the eye
They say that I am as dark
As the midnight sky
I dress up in black
As if someone died
When I said I just like the color
I lied
Maybe it’s in my genetics
To live this strange way
But trufully I just want
To die this way
:'(xx always here..x
Can I maybe give a tiny bit of advice?
Okay, the thing is, listen to the way it sounds out loud. The number of syllables in each line contributes to how smooth asnd eloquent it sounds when read.
For example, stanza 3 might sound a tad bit better if the lines were closer to the same length.
What I absolutely adore about your poetry is that the words you use to rhyme are original, like dark and sharp in this particular one.
Really great job, meghan222. Keep it up :p
Thanks for the advice 😀
I really liked your poem…
=] Realy amazing. I understand every thing your going through its like we change but no one notest then when th3y finaly do THEY DONT CARE
keep it up girly be who you are